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| Subject: badddddd writing for a contest Fri Jan 13, 2012 3:03 am | |
| here. im too lazy to even write a description so I'll just give it to you. - Spoiler:
Hailey was by the lake skipping stones. The trees were rustling as the wind blew her hair high. She pick up a flat stone-- just perfect for skipping, and threw it against the water’s surface. It seemed to jump across the water, as if something was chasing it. Yes, she thought. Hailey rolled up her sweater sleeve so she could check the time. Seven ‘o clock-- time for dinner. She got up and began to kick the dark brown dirt as she walked by the trees. Something came by the corner of her eye. She turned her head. It seemed to be moving, and slumped down low.
Hailey ran towards the image, noticing it was just a dog. He looked abandoned and dirty. “A stray…” she said. “and a boy. ….Well, at least ya’ look like one.” Hailey rubbed the dirt off of him and went through his long, golden fur, revealing a scar. “Seems like you’ve been in some fights.” she scratched his ear. “Well, see you later.” When Hailey got inside, her mother put her food on the table and sat her down. Hailey was about to stab her food with her fork when she noticed what was for dinner. “Mashed potatoes and steak again?” she complained. “I don’t get much outta’ my job, you know.” Hailey’s mother sighed. “I promise we’ll be having new foods by Wednesday.” Hailey just shrugged her shoulders. She still had to eat. She carefully grabbed her fork and knife and cut through her meat. There was about six pieces of cut steak when she was done. Hailey stuck every one of them in her mouth, leaving all the fat and bones. “I don’t want my potatoes, Ma’.” Hailey said, and pushed her plate to the side. “Leave ‘em,” her mother replied, jerking her hand towards the food. “I’ll eat it.” “All right,” Hailey agreed. “I’m gonna’ go sit outside.” And there she was. Sitting on the bench. She noticed the same dog she saw last time was in her mother’s cherry bush. Hailey pulled his tail, out came a whine. “Sorry,” Hailey apologized. The dog came out and shook his fur as if he just came out of the bath. He seemed to be hungry because there was a sudden rumble that came from his stomach. Hailey looked at him and giggled. “I think I have some bones,” she said, and went inside to get the leftovers of her steak. Hailey grabbed every bone on her plate. “You don’t need these, right?” she asked her mother who was washing dishes.
im bad at accents i know
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Marceline EPIC Sorcerer
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| Subject: Re: badddddd writing for a contest Fri Jan 13, 2012 3:12 am | |
| Omg this is amazing taostie <3 | |
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Italy-Chan Wizard
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| Subject: Re: badddddd writing for a contest Fri Jan 13, 2012 8:22 pm | |
| ok this a not bad writing i liked the part about steak | |
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Lily Wizard
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| Subject: Re: badddddd writing for a contest Fri Jan 13, 2012 8:51 pm | |
| that is very good writing | |
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| Subject: Re: badddddd writing for a contest Fri Jan 13, 2012 9:39 pm | |
| @Kat: Thank you! :3
@Cake: SHE WANTS ICE CREAM OK |
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