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FEVER-FOR-THE-BEIBER
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PostSubject: Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat   Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat EmptySun Feb 19, 2012 9:13 pm

This is the story

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And thats what i got so far so critke critgue critque i still cant spell it (:
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PostSubject: Re: Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat   Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat EmptySun Feb 19, 2012 9:56 pm

Try not to make it boring in the beginning.
Think of, "so what."
Like give a better intro so that the readers are more hooked.
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PostSubject: Re: Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat   Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat EmptySun Feb 19, 2012 10:23 pm

You should try to show what's happening, not tell it. Also, I wouldn't count a couple sentences as a chapter.

For future reference, it's spelled 'critique'.
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PostSubject: Re: Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat   Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat EmptyMon Feb 20, 2012 12:59 am

Uhhhhh I don't think that's a chapter. It's more like....like.....a sentence. Try adding in more details and ask yourself if you can actually imagine that it's happening to you.
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PostSubject: Re: Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat   Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat EmptyMon Feb 20, 2012 5:36 am

This isn't really a chaptar. More like a sentence, I think you should put a little more detail.
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PostSubject: Re: Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat   Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat EmptyMon Feb 20, 2012 6:55 am

This isn't a chapter its like a sentence in my point.Also make it more like interesting the reader gets bored and you give the info right away make the reader think about it.
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PostSubject: Re: Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat   Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat EmptyTue Feb 21, 2012 8:24 pm

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Uhhhhh I don't think that's a chapter. It's more like....like.....a sentence. Try adding in more details and ask yourself if you can actually imagine that it's happening to you.
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