Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat

Subject: Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat Sun Feb 19, 2012 9:13 pm

This is the story

Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat 1329685543_b09807a0_1329685543

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And thats what i got so far so critke critgue critque i still cant spell it (:

Guest

Try not to make it boring in the beginning.
Think of, "so what."
Like give a better intro so that the readers are more hooked.

Guest

You should try to show what's happening, not tell it. Also, I wouldn't count a couple sentences as a chapter.

For future reference, it's spelled 'critique'.

Subject: Re: Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat Mon Feb 20, 2012 12:59 am

Uhhhhh I don't think that's a chapter. It's more like....like.....a sentence. Try adding in more details and ask yourself if you can actually imagine that it's happening to you.

Subject: Re: Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat Mon Feb 20, 2012 5:36 am

This isn't really a chaptar. More like a sentence, I think you should put a little more detail.

Subject: Re: Mystery School: Part 1 of 6: Mystery Meat Mon Feb 20, 2012 6:55 am

This isn't a chapter its like a sentence in my point.Also make it more like interesting the reader gets bored and you give the info right away make the reader think about it.

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♥ṫᾇῥṫᾇῥ♥ wrote:: Uhhhhh I don't think that's a chapter. It's more like....like.....a sentence. Try adding in more details and ask yourself if you can actually imagine that it's happening to you.

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